A bit of advice, gentlemen: never try to pick up a girl like this. If she doesn’t slap you, I’m sure someone nearby will.
I mean, does this guy really think he’s going to pick up a girl like this? Even Ed Lane isn’t brazen enough to attempt this kind of a pick-up.
I counted at least 54 things wrong in the first sentence. See how well you can do. It’s like Highlights for Kids all over again!